Perfect though

A few days ago, I woke up
with a different head. It was not
the one I’d gone to bed
in.

My old head wanted
you (nonspecific
you, you in general, you singular or plural,
you-who-is-not-me)
to notice me and approve.
Old head did so many things to gain your attention,
each one pulled as tight and perfect
as the rigging on a tall ship in some draconian navy,
always tacking hard into the shoulder of a strong wind
seeking conquest,
pennants and gold leaf,
pennants and gold leaf.
Oh look, look, look, I have brought you
a dead mouse
a pie
a painting look
I made you this
look
I wrote a book
here is my heart.

My new head waved its hands at that and laughed. It spoke,
for the first time in my voice,
which
to my surprise,
was birds it was blossom and the kindness of my mother. It was the cat and kettle, it was the imperfect mitten, knitted and given.

It said
you are as lovely as a flower
do you see? And
I said
yes.

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About chiller

Rachel Coldbreath spent 20 years working internationally as a technical specialist on large data collections for law firms, before becoming disabled. She blogs on a variety of topics from the news and politics to gardening and how very annoying it is, being disabled. Habits include drilling holes about 1mm away from where they ought to be, and embarking with great enthusiasm on tasks for which she is neither physically nor intellectually equipped.
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27 Responses to Perfect though

  1. dapplegrey says:

    Every once in a while I read a poem that I don’t want to get to the end of, that slows me down to its own pace (I’m afraid too often I race through far too fast). I took a deliciously long time to read this and then started again at the beginning. And lines from it keep playing over in my head: pennants and gold leaf, pennants and gold leaf. (That line repeated is wonderful!). I love it. Thank you.

  2. John Woodman says:

    “the imperfect mitten, knitted and given” – wonderful. Jeant dy mie, as we say in Manx – well done.

  3. capojop says:

    I may have to keep coming back to this for some time. I think it might be a powerful spell, making you a sorceress. Everything you write is so deliciously crisp. Like a blue winter’s morning or the first cox apple of autumn.

  4. Rebel_Girl says:

    This poem is just wonderful!!!

  5. This is it Chiller..I was looking for such a thought…and your poem just brings it….I have my own blog on philately ..https://philatelystampcollection.wordpress.com

  6. Spangle says:

    I love this. ..especially the imperfect mitten x

  7. Interesting read, shared with a few friends, all loved it.

  8. Beautiful. This is lovely. Loved it! 🙂

  9. i like your article, very inspiring and thank you for your post 🙂

  10. Tas Johnston says:

    All I thought was, “Yes.”
    Good job.

  11. This poem is really lovely!

  12. mywords331 says:

    remarkable….nd hello Im new in blogging.please like my first post my words.

  13. I haven’t read such a beautirful poem like that one in such a long time. It’s so incredibly good. Thank you so much for this little piece of art.

  14. Pingback: Perfect though — Chiller – exactspeechcom

  15. thatguywhowrote says:

    This was an awesome piece I enjoyed it

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